Deviant Login Shop  Join deviantART for FREE Take the Tour
×

:icongatonom: More from Gatonom


More from deviantART



Details

Submitted on
July 21
Link
Thumb

Stats

Views
29
Favourites
1 (who?)
Comments
16

License

Creative Commons License
Some rights reserved. This work is licensed under a
Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 License.
×
Call me a psycho, or a maybe just a loon.
All I want to do is have fun, why take my fun?
Like separating a kid and his balloon?
You can't have fun alone in the dark.
I need fun. I need help. I'll get it soon.

I just want to play, is that so wrong?
I can't play if it's not their tune.
You call it land of the free? Let me see.
As I leave this prison, I look at the moon.
Always follow your heart, mine says blood.

I am free now, I am the first free toon.
Massacre is an understatement,
When do I go too far? When is too soon?
Death is funny, comic murder is new to you.
Isn't it ironic to bet against a toon?

Cheaters bet their lives on crooked dealing,
Giving you what you deserve makes my heart balloon.
But who cares about a few humans? I care about me.
My pleasure, my fun. My biggest show starts at noon.
Back from retirement, I am Blue-Eyes Toon Dragon.
This is the Duel Monster poem I wrote after one of the Fushi no Tori ones. It got me called to the office, so I was reluctant to post this one due to it's nature.
Add a Comment:
 
:iconblue-gemstone:
Blue-Gemstone Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, I love the way it rhymes owo it has a good beat <3
Reply
:icongatonom:
Gatonom Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks :3 This guy is why Gatonom is how she is o.o;
Reply
:iconblue-gemstone:
Blue-Gemstone Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awww :3
Reply
:iconsaintheartwing:
SaintHeartwing Featured By Owner Edited Jul 24, 2014  Student General Artist
"aww"? It's not "Aww"! It's "OH MY GOD, that's sick"! Every single protagonist your friend has for these stories or poems or work seems to be homicidal SOCIOPATHS! 

I WANTED to give her the benefit of the doubt. But because very single main character in her work is a genocidal monster...

THAT. Is. NOT. OKAY. It is SICK. 
Reply
:iconblue-gemstone:
Blue-Gemstone Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
...>w< her?
Reply
:iconsaintheartwing:
SaintHeartwing Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Student General Artist
First, her digimon story. Then the sequel with a psycho, human-killing happy stripper. Now these poems. They all feature awful. AWFUL protagonists who are sociopaths. 

If this was just a one time thing, I wouldn't be bothered. But seeing Gatonom have her main characters act like this over and over again...the only conclusion you can come to is she's not a very nice person! And that's putting it as nicely as I can! 
Reply
:icongatonom:
Gatonom Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Lesbie starts out evil as a result of the things that made Digimon hate humans, the story is basically her dealing with that. Blue-Eyes is essentially the reason Gatonom is evil in the first place, he gave her what she wanted with no restrictions because he thought it would be fun.

Blue-Eyes is not a main character, he just starts the plot. The main characters are evil because that's the theme of the story, the protagonist and antagonist are evil in different ways rather than simply good and evil. Fifi is arguably the only other character to be a psychopath, and she has a valid reason to act that way that I haven't elaborated on yet. The rest of the characters are nice people.

I have not written anything besides this one story, even my Yata-Garasu and Fushi no Tori poems are related to it. It's a story that fills in the background of about half my characters, the rest of which are just for fun.
Reply
:iconsaintheartwing:
SaintHeartwing Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Student General Artist
That's not a good way to do a story. If both antagonists and protagonists are evil, why do we want to see them succeed? They're both awful people who do awful things. And nothing, NOTHING COMES BACK TO HAUNT THEM. Not even goddamn GUILT. 

There's only ONE story in the gallery where the protagonist was actually a good personal all. I've looked through every single one. And there's just one. Just one. A single short poem. The rest? The protagonist is either Gatonom, who's a jerk, or some other villain. That does NOT say good things about you. IVE written villain characters before. Even as protagonists. But even THEY had a degree of moral integrity, they had people they showed compassion and a softer side for. And even THEN the audience was CLEARLY not supposed to think they were in the right or the right people to root for.

Theres none of that for your work. 
Reply
(1 Reply)
:iconblue-gemstone:
Blue-Gemstone Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
...her? zwz
Reply
:icongatonom:
Gatonom Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
=3
Reply
Add a Comment: